Good. My evil plan proceeds apace. Soon I will perhaps Not Suck So Much.
Problems still: on the nose-ness, not enough conflict, exposition that at time thuds like a heavy solid thing accelerating at 9.81 meters/sec^2, sentences that don't get enough editing love, insufficient invention.
And by the way. You can blame emelye_miller for the Skyclad Scoobies on the Solstice Core Four Ritual Sexmagic Plot Bunny. Or choose a verb you like better there.