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Houston, we have a draft

A complete draft. Oh man. Almost 20,000 words. It's not good yet. Needs trimming: the fight sequence is now too long, I suspect. I did solve my plot problem in the second half. I hope. All the new material needs tightening and sentence-smithing in a big way. I lose my grip on my controlling metaphors during these spasms of writing vast swathes of text.

But! Draft! If my brain falls out of my skull tonight and doesn't get reinstalled before Thursday, I have something to post!

Phew.

Did you know that I have another 12K words of fiction set in this verse in draft format? Yeah. Two earlier stories that are too weird for public consumption. But I think the sequel will be a corker.

Your random link for tonight: people with more disposable cash than you & me are bidding on BPAL on Ebay.
O.O Holy shit!

*is almost speechless*

It's only 5 mL...I mean....just...gah!
Yeah. I know. The Arabian Nights prototype is over $300 as well. The profits from the Lab's Ebay sales go to charity, at least.
Totally impossible. I've read everything you've written about a million times over. Your writing is brilliant!
Hey, thanks. Feels good to hear that :) When I read over what I've written, all I see are "black holes of wasted opportunity" (as somebody once said) and clumsy transitions and gear-grinding moments of character change. *headdesk*
Holy hell, are these people nuts?

Draft is good! I know what you mean about fight scenes. I frequently find myself wanting to animate them (had I the skill to do so) rather than try to capture them in text, because there's so much to convey, but then if there are too many words you lose the sense of immediacy.
I keep thinking: at least the money from that auction goes to charity.

I'm still learning how to do fight scenes. Pacing up. Shorter, tenser sentences. It's not the time for leisurely digressions into exposition or the background of anything. Then you gotta balance the need to mention enough that the reader sees what you think is important about the scene with the need not to over-specify.

Right now I'm over-specifying, because to get through it I had to make myself see each sub-sequence in detail. So I know I'll be tightening.

Gah. Why didn't they tell me writing would be so much work? No, wait, they did.
Right now I'm over-specifying, because to get through it I had to make myself see each sub-sequence in detail. So I know I'll be tightening.

That's probably the safest approach. Otherwise you end up with blocking problems that could result in Xander getting beheaded rather than the demon du jour, and nobody wants that.